Adding+details+to+writing

So often, with writers of every age, I see a general lacking of details in various writing forms. Whether it be jotting in a journal, writing a narrative, or just telling someone about yourself, I see young students especially struggle with providing those extra details that really makes what they are saying worth reading. It seems to me that students are too quick to cut off on their writing subjects just a few sentences in. They just have a hard time carrying their thoughts forward, but with a little help and added thinking time, I believe that this issue can be resolved. I have seen how adding a few simple details to students' writing can make a world of difference, and I've sat down before with kids and let them see what details in writing can do. I would love to do a lesson on this because at the middle school level, I think adding details to writing is a common theme.

// Hi, Ron, I think you have a good idea in progress here, but there are no specifics. We'll be doing an activity in class related to this that draws on Ch. 2 from Noden. If you pursue your idea further, you'll want to be sure that your lesson is different from what we do in class. See my e-mail to the class for some general tips, and I look forward to you fleshing your ideas out much further. Best, Dr. Y //

Ron Olson- Language Mini-lesson Draft